IELTS Commentry: April 2022

Friday 29 April 2022

IELTS Report, topic: Multiple Bar Chart of US’ Processed Food Export Markets (from IELTS High Scorer’s Choice series, Academic Set 3)

This is a model response to a Writing Task 1 topic from High Scorer’s Choice IELTS Practice Tests book series (reprinted with permission). This answer is close to IELTS Band 9.

Set 3 Academic book, Practice Test 14

Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart below shows the US’ top ten processed food export markets for last year and six years ago.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Top 10 US Processed Food Export Markets (for last year and 6 years ago)
Multiple bar chart of US processed food export markets (from IELTS High Scorer's Choice series, Academic Set 3 book)

Sample Band 9 Report

The bar chart gives data on the top ten processed food export markets for the United States from last year and six years ago.

It can be clearly seen that all the countries in the bar chart imported more processed food from the US last year than 6 years ago.

The largest market by far for last year and six years ago was Canada, with income for the US of 13.2 billion US dollars and 9.3 billion US dollars, respectively. The second highest figures were for what is identified as the Rest of World at 11 billion US dollars and 6.3 billion US dollars, respectively.

The remaining eight countries ranged from Mexico with income for the US of 6.1 billion US dollars for last year and 4 billion US dollars for six years ago to Hong Kong with income for the US of 0.8 billion US dollars for last year and 0.3 billion US dollars for six years ago. Therefore, the two largest markets the US depends on for their processed food exports were the closest ones, Canada and Mexico.

Compared to 6 years ago, last year US processed food exports to Australia experienced the most significant growth of 300%, to China, Hong Kong and the Philippines – just over 200%, and to the other countries – under 100%.

Go here for more IELTS Band 9 Reports

https://ift.tt/lqWa1N9
from IELTS-Blog https://ift.tt/TZe4BEo
via IFTTT

Thursday 28 April 2022

IELTS test in Iran – April 2022 (Academic Module)

We are grateful to A.R. from Iran who remembered the following questions from a recent IELTS exam:

Writing test

Writing task 1 (a report)

We were given a two-column chart describing the percentages of people per household in the UK.

Writing task 2 (an essay)

In some countries, students are required to study a limited range of subjects from the age of fifteen. In other countries, however, students study a wide range of subjects until they leave school.

What are the benefits of each education system? Which system is better?

Speaking test

Part 1 (Interview)

– Can you tell me your full name, please?
– Do you work or study?
– What are the benefits of your work?
– At what age did you start learning science?
– Is it important to learn science?
– Is science a difficult subject to learn?

Part 2 (Cue Card)

Talk about a book you have read recently. Please say

– what kind of book it is
– who wrote it
– what it is about
– and explain whether you enjoyed reading it, and why.

Part 3 (Discussion)

– What kind of books are popular in your country?
– What is the difference between the books that older and younger people like?
– Who do you think reads more, boys or girls?
– Is it good for children to read story books?
– Does it help develop their character?
– Why do some people like to read history books?

https://ift.tt/pXEN3C5
from IELTS-Blog https://ift.tt/10VXFlt
via IFTTT

Wednesday 27 April 2022

IELTS Speaking test in Thailand – April 2022

L.P. took IELTS in Thailand and remembered the following questions from the Speaking test:

Speaking test

Part 1 (Interview)

– What is your name?
– Where are you from?
– Do you work or study?
– Do you like taking photos?
– When do you take photos?
– Is there a family photo that you especially like?
– Do you use your phone or your camera to take photos? Why?
– Would you like to become a better photographer? How?

– Do you have a favourite website?
– What kind of websites do you visit regularly?
– What kind of websites are popular in your country?

Part 2 (Cue Card)

Talk about a long walk you enjoyed. Please say

– where and when it was
– who you were with
– what you saw
– and explain why you enjoyed the walk so much.

Follow up question: Do you walk often?

Part 3 (Discussion)

– Do you think walking is a good leisure activity?
– What types of leisure activities are popular in your country?
– Are leisure activities important? Why/why not?
– Are leisure activities that are popular today the same as the ones that were popular in the past?
– Do you think that leisure activities that are popular today will remain popular in the future?

https://ift.tt/ULRfebo
from IELTS-Blog https://ift.tt/ZBCgi7H
via IFTTT

Tuesday 26 April 2022

IELTS essay, topic: Crime rates are likely to decline due to the advancements in technology (agree/disagree)

This essay topic was seen in a recent IELTS test in the UAE

Crime rates are likely to decline due to the advancements in technology, which will help prevent and solve crimes in an easier way. Do you agree or disagree?

Sample Band 8 Essay

Nowadays technology is advancing faster than ever and many fields are benefitting from the opportunities this trend presents. Some think that crime prevention can be one possible application of new technologies, by allowing to deter offenders or solve crimes in a faster and easier way. In my opinion, innovation in crime prevention can be a game-changer that will reduce both the number of crimes committed and the time it takes to catch those responsible for them.

Not everyone is optimistic about the prospects of the use of new technologies in crime prevention, and those who subscribe to the more pessimistic view say that advanced technologies can be accessed by criminals, therefore raising the crime rates. Such tools can, indeed, cause more damage if they fall in the wrong hands; however, it would require the offenders to be highly skilled to be able to use the modern technologies. Statistically, many of them tend to have a lower level of education, and for that reason they are likely to stick to the old ways of committing crimes, whereas the minority of highly skilled criminals are unlikely to make a big difference to the crime levels.

Law enforcement workforce, on the other hand, has a much better grip on modern technology. Nowadays police officers and detectives undergo special training, take regular skill update courses, and use high-tech equipment. Facial recognition and thermal imaging are just two examples of the important tools that police are already using to find and catch offenders faster. Ordinary citizens can do their part in preventing burglaries by installing sophisticated systems with sensors, CCTV video feed and various alarms to detect and deter thieves. The combined effort will, no doubt, push the crime curve down.

To sum up, even though the wonders of technology are available to everyone, it seems to me that they will better assist law enforcement in solving crimes, and law-abiding citizens in protecting themselves and their property, rather than felons. This will tip the balance in favour of reduction in crime rate and make the world a safer place.

Teacher’s comment: The writer fully addressed all parts of the task in their response. Their ideas are well-developed, extended and supported. Paraphrasing, referencing, substitution, sequencing of information and paragraphing are skillfully used in this essay, contributing to its high level of cohesion and coherence. The wide range of vocabulary and accurate word choice allows the writer to convey their message precisely. This essay has many examples of uncommon lexical items, all appropriately used. The writer has a great control of grammar, they follow the rules of punctuation and use complex sentence structures very well. Overall, this essay is likely to get Band 8 or 8.5 in IELTS

Click here to see more IELTS essays of Band 8

https://ift.tt/6HXWyvh
from IELTS-Blog https://ift.tt/i7NcylX
via IFTTT

Monday 25 April 2022

IELTS test in the UK – April 2022 (Academic Module)

Our friends N.Z. and A.T. took their Academic IELTS tests in the UK and collectively remembered the following questions:

Writing test

Writing task 1 (a report)

We were given a table describing the percentages of student satisfaction with 3 different subjects.

Writing task 2 (an essay)

In some countries the percentage of 15 year-olds in the population is already significant and is continuing to grow. Are there more advantages or disadvantages to this trend?

Speaking test

Part 1 (Interview)

– Can you tell me your full name, please?
– What can I call you?
– Where did you grow up?
– Did you have a good childhood?
– Did you have many friends as a child?
– Did you go to parks often?
– Do you like visiting parks now?
– What do you like better, to visit a park or someone’s house?

Part 2 (Cue Card)

Talk about a walk, a boat tour or a bicycle trip that you would like to take. Please say

– where you would go
– when you would go
– who you would go with
– and explain why you would like to take this walk/trip/tour.

Part 3 (Discussion)

– Do you think that traffic is the main contributor to CO2 emissions?
– Do you think this will get better or worse in the future? In what way?
– What can the government do to reduce CO2 emissions?
– How about individuals, what can they do?
– Do you think that city planners take the needs of pedestrians sufficiently into consideration?

https://ift.tt/2ZXqSy0
from IELTS-Blog https://ift.tt/KtI6Sz7
via IFTTT

Friday 22 April 2022

IELTS Essay Samples of Band 8

Here you can find IELTS Essay samples of Band 8, written by students and graded by an IELTS teacher.

Last updated: April 22, 2022

Note: the essays are checked by an IELTS teacher, not an IELTS examiner or examiner trainer.All the bands are approximate.

How To Write an IELTS Band 8 Essay

Essay samples are useful to get an idea what a Band 8 essay looks like, but how can YOU write a Band 8 essay? As you know, an IELTS essay is scored using 4 criteria:

1. Task Response
2. Coherence and Cohesion
3. Lexical Resource
4. Grammatical Range and Accuracy

Many test takers are unsure what is wrong with their essay, why they keep scoring Band 6.5 and how to take their writing to Band 8 level. Is that how you feel, too? Keep reading then, because we are just about to analyse a Band 6.5 essay and show you what to change in it, to get a Band 8 score in IELTS.

Colours show elements relating to each criterion that affect the Band Score of this sample IELTS essay. Hold mouse over highlighted words (or tap on mobile) to see the comments, suggestions and corrections.

IELTS Essay Analysed and Rewritten from Band 6.5 to Band 8

IELTS Essay Topic: Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

IELTS Sample Essay – Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion and Lexical Resource Analysis

Nowadays, money is one of the most significant materials in our lives. To many people, it is appropriate to marry for money rather than love. However, I believe that both love and money should be bouncetogether in any marriages.Certainly, money is an important part in our lives [TS]. It is hard for any persons to accept a partner which* does not have money or at least a job to take care of future family. Hence, said “marry for money” also has its right in some extent.However, love should be the root of any marriages [TS]. Firstly, it is because love is such a glue to connect two persons which have their own lives, become one (NC). So, they can share each other’s the sadness, happiness to overcome any difficulties in daily lives. Moreover, love makes people growing up because they do not only have responsibility to themselves, but also to their partners as well. That is why marrying with love is always encouraged.In my opinion, I think that both love and money is both necessary [TS]. Marriage relying on money would be rapidly disintegrated when unfortunately the money is run out. In contrary*, marriage relying on love would sometimes come to end when they could not earn money to carry out family (NC), such as paying bills, buying food, etc. Therefore, love and money should stand together in marriage even though their contribution could be unbalanced (NC).As we have seen, marriage without either money or love would come to an unhappy ending. So I believe that they both have their own contribution to a merry family.

1. Task Response Analysis: This essay follows the task requirements quite well. Both points of view are discussed (in paragraphs 2 and 3) and the writer’s personal opinion is offered (in the introduction, paragraph 4 and the conclusion). The opinion is clear. The paragraph on money is not very well developed and not entirely clear.
Approximate score for Task Response: Band 7.

2. Coherence and Cohesion Analysis: Most linking expressions are appropriate but two are not (see asterisk *). Coherence is concerned with the effectiveness of what the essay is trying to communicate. The essay is well structured – each paragraph announces its topic clearly [TS] and the introduction announces the opinion of the writer. Sometimes the ideas are not entirely clear inside the paragraphs (see NC). Also the writer has a tendency to be repetitive.
Approximate score for Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.

3. Lexical Resource Analysis: The use of vocabulary seems quite reasonable but attempts to use a wider range
are not always successful (see corrections above). Probably not quite good enough for a 7.
Approximate score for Lexical Resource: Band 6 or 6.5.

The same IELTS Sample Essay – Grammatical Range and Accuracy Analysis

Certainly, money is an important part in our lives. It is hard for any persons to accept a partner which does not have money or at least a job to take care of future family. Hence, said “marry for money” (#5) also has its right in some extent.

However, love should be the root of any marriages. Firstly, it is because love is such a glue to connect two persons which have their own lives, become one. So, they can share each other’s the sadness, happiness to overcome any difficulties in daily lives. Moreover, love makes people growing up because they do not only have responsibility to themselves, but also to their partners as well. That is why marrying with love is always encouraged.

In my opinion, I think that both love and money is both necessary. Marriage relying on money would be rapidly disintegrated when unfortunately the money is run out. In contrary, marriage relying on love would sometimes come to end when they could not earn money to carry out family, such as paying bills, buying food, etc. Therefore, love and money should stand together in marriage even though their contribution could be unbalanced.

As we have seen, marriage without either money or love would come to an unhappy ending. So I believe that they both have their own contribution to a merry family.

4. Grammatical Range and Accuracy Analysis: Although the essay is quite easy to follow, it has too many grammatical errors in too many sentences to merit a 7 score (see corrections highlighted above). The range of grammatical constructions used seems quite good.
Approximate score for Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6 or 6.5.

Improving the Sample Essay to Achieve an IELTS Band 7

The same essay now at around a Band 7 level might look something like this. Read it carefully and compare it with the original:

Certainly, money plays an important part in our lives. It is hard for any persons to accept a partner who does not have money or at least a job to take care of their future family. Hence, it is said, “marry for money” is right in some extent.

However, love should be the root of any marriage. Firstly, it is because love is such a strong bond between two persons who have their own lives, and become one. So, they can share each other’s sadness, happiness to overcome any difficulties in their daily lives. Moreover, love makes people grow up because they do not only have responsibility to themselves, but also to their partners as well. That is why marrying for love is always encouraged.

In my opinion, I think that love and money are both necessary. A marriage relying on money would rapidly disintegrate when unfortunately the money ran out. In contrary, a marriage relying on love would sometimes come to end when they could not earn money to carry out family duties such as paying bills, buying food, etc. Therefore, love and money should stand together in marriage even though their contribution could be unbalanced.

As we have seen, marriage without either money or love would come to an unhappy end. So I believe that they both make their own contribution to a merry family.

Improving the Sample Essay to Achieve an IELTS Band 8

To turn the Band 7 sample essay into a Band 8 one would require further improvement in range and accuracy of grammar, greater clarity and better connection of ideas, and a wider range of appropriate, higher level vocabulary.

So the same sample essay now at around a Band 8 level might look something like this. Once again, read it carefully and compare it with the original:

Nowadays, money is one of the most significant elements in our lives. So, for many people, it may seem appropriate to marry for money rather than love. Certainly, money plays an important part in our lives. It is challenging for any persons to accept a partner who does not have money, or at least a job to take care of their future family. Hence, the expression, “marry for money” seems appropriate, in some extent, at least. However, I believe that marriage should involve a combination of both love and money.

Clearly, love should be the foundation of any marriage. This is because firstly, love is such a strong bond between two persons, who have their own lives, yet become one. They can share each other’s sadness or happiness in order to overcome any difficulties in daily lives. Moreover, love fosters maturity because each member of a couple no longer has responsibility only for themselves, but also for their partner. These are just two, key reasons why marrying for love should always be encouraged.

In my opinion, love and money are equally necessary. A marriage relying solely on money might rapidly disintegrate in the unfortunate event of the money running out. Similarly, a marriage relying on love alone might sometimes come to an end if the couple could not earn enough money to manage their family’s obligations such as paying bills, or buying food. Therefore, love and money should stand together in marriage, even though their contribution might often be somewhat unequal.

To summarise, marriage without either money or love could come to an unfortunate end. For that reason, I would claim that they both make their own, vital contribution to the creation of a happy family.

If after reading these sample essays you are still missing something and can’t write at Band 8 level, don’t panic. We have a book that can help to improve your grammar and sentence formation, teach you how to connect your ideas better and give you a wide range of appropriate, higher level vocabulary. Go here to discover the “IELTS Success Formula” book.

suggested corrections are in the window

https://ift.tt/hsdKV9k
from IELTS-Blog https://ift.tt/69oL3lZ
via IFTTT

IELTS Speaking test in Ghana – April 2022

P.A. from Ghana remembered the following questions from her IELTS Speaking test:

Speaking test

Part 1 (Interview)

– What is your name?
– Do you work or study?
– Where are you from?
– What is the weather like in your country?
– Do you prefer cold or hot weather?
– Do you think people should be able to choose the weather they like?

– Have you gotten lost?
– Have you ever had to help someone who was lost?
– Do people in your country help people who have lost their way?

Part 2 (Cue Card)

Talk about something interesting that you would like to know more about. Please say

– what it is
– why it is of interest to you
– how you plan to find out more about it
– and explain why it is important that you learn more about it.

Part 3 (Discussion)

– How do people get information in your country?
– How reliable is the information in your country?
– Has information people used to get in the past changed nowadays? In what way?

https://ift.tt/hsdKV9k
from IELTS-Blog https://ift.tt/QUZy612
via IFTTT

IELTS Commentry

Friday 29 April 2022

IELTS Report, topic: Multiple Bar Chart of US’ Processed Food Export Markets (from IELTS High Scorer’s Choice series, Academic Set 3)

Sample Band 9 Report

Thursday 28 April 2022

IELTS test in Iran – April 2022 (Academic Module)

Wednesday 27 April 2022

IELTS Speaking test in Thailand – April 2022

Tuesday 26 April 2022

IELTS essay, topic: Crime rates are likely to decline due to the advancements in technology (agree/disagree)

Monday 25 April 2022

IELTS test in the UK – April 2022 (Academic Module)

Friday 22 April 2022

IELTS Essay Samples of Band 8

How To Write an IELTS Band 8 Essay

IELTS Essay Analysed and Rewritten from Band 6.5 to Band 8

Improving the Sample Essay to Achieve an IELTS Band 8

IELTS Speaking test in Ghana – April 2022

Total Pageviews

Blog Archive

Friday 29 April 2022

Sample Band 9 Report

Related posts:

Thursday 28 April 2022

Related posts:

Wednesday 27 April 2022

Related posts:

Tuesday 26 April 2022

Related posts:

Monday 25 April 2022

Related posts:

Friday 22 April 2022

How To Write an IELTS Band 8 Essay

IELTS Essay Analysed and Rewritten from Band 6.5 to Band 8

Improving the Sample Essay to Achieve an IELTS Band 8

Related posts:

Related posts: